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Write an essay between 100-150 words: What are the advantages and disadvantages of being famous?
Fame seems to appeal to everyone due to its attraction and glamour. Many prefer to be a famous one or a celebrity to change their life. However, everything has its both side. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of fame.
To begin with, they get a special treatment everywhere they go. Celebrities get special tables at restaurants, best sit at theatres and VIP treatment at clubs or events. They get free parking at hotels or they cars are guarded at events.
On the other hand, celebrities have no private, that make they are constantly judged. They are judged for the clothes they wear, their bodies, make-up, personalities and cars that they drive. Newspapers, magazines, blogs and social networks you can always find the rude, nasty, insulting, and derogatory and lies about celebrity’s daily routine. It’s like we forget that they’re human beings.
Fame carries also worry about your own safety and the safety of your family. There is always a danger that a crazy fan may try to kidnap or kill you or your children, so it is necessary to employ bodyguards.
All in all, fame may be nice but not an easy thing to live with. You have money but you do not feel safe, you have friends and fans but you can never be sure if they like you for who you are or for your money.
Fame seems to appeal to everyone due to its attraction and glamour. Many prefer to be a famous one or a celebrity to change their life. However, everything has its both side. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of fame.
To begin with, they get a special treatment everywhere they go. Celebrities get special tables at restaurants, best sit at theatres and VIP treatment at clubs or events. They get free parking at hotels or they cars are guarded at events.
On the other hand, celebrities have no private, that make they are constantly judged. They are judged for the clothes they wear, their bodies, make-up, personalities and cars that they drive. Newspapers, magazines, blogs and social networks you can always find the rude, nasty, insulting, and derogatory and lies about celebrity’s daily routine. It’s like we forget that they’re human beings.
Fame carries also worry about your own safety and the safety of your family. There is always a danger that a crazy fan may try to kidnap or kill you or your children, so it is necessary to employ bodyguards.
All in all, fame may be nice but not an easy thing to live with. You have money but you do not feel safe, you have friends and fans but you can never be sure if they like you for who you are or for your money.
Mọi người sửa giúp em bài này ạ! Em cảm ơn mọi người nhiều <3
Write an essay between 100-150 words: What are the advantages and disadvantages of being famous?
Fame seems to appeal to everyone due to its attraction and glamour. Many prefer to be a famous one or a celebrity to change their life. However, everything has its both side -> two sides : pros and cons. ( Bn muốn nhấn mạnh ở pros and cons thì nên nói rõ 2 mặt chứ both: cả, nó ko có nghĩa là 2 mặt ). This essay will discuss the pros and cons of fame.-> Câu này phải bỏ vì đây là văn viết chứ ko phải văn nói.
To begin with, they get a special treatment everywhere they go. Bổ sung thêm trong câu này luôn nha : They can also get good medical care ỏ excellent entertainment. For example, we can treated by well-qualified doctors n high qualify hospitals. Celebrities get special tables at restaurants, best sit at theatres-> theaters and VIP treatment at clubs or events. They get free parking at hotels or they cars are guarded at events. -> Ko đc hợp lí nên bỏ bớt đi.
* Thức ra đã nói đến advantages và disavantages của being famous thì bn phải liệt kê đủ tức là bn nói 3 pros thì cx khoảng 3-4 cons chứ ko đc 1 pros mà 3-4 cons đc.Nếu như thế nó gọi là kết cấu chưa phù hợp.
-----> Trâm sẽ liệt kê một số pros nữa nha:
* Nevertheless, The most obvious advantages of being famous is the fact that it's very easy to earn money so they can purchase things. They can enjoy their life and have a good conditions like a large house with garden, big living room, large and big bedroom,.. with a lot of ne modern technologies..... etc.
* Moreover, it's interesting to appear on TV or magazines and be admitted by lots of people.
------ Chú ý sử dụng đa dạng từ và từ nối.
On the other hand, celebrities have no private-> private life -> như thế mói biểu thị rõ ý nghĩa, that make they are constantly-> frequently judged. They are judged for the clothes they wear, their bodies, make-up, personalities and cars that they drive. In Newspapers, magazines, blogs and social networks, you can always find the rude, nasty, insulting, and derogatory and-> or lies about celebrity’s daily routine. It’s like we forget that they’re human beings.-> nên bỏ đi.
Fame carries-> The famous also worry about your->their own safety and the safety of your-> their family. There is always a danger that a crazy fans or anti-fans may try to kidnap or kill you or your children, so it is necessary to employ bodyguards.
All in all, fame may be nice but not an easy thing to live with. You have money but you do not feel safe, you have friends and fans but you can never be sure if they like you for who you are or for your money.
* Kết bài khá độc đáo tuy nhiên ở ngay sau câu đầu tiên bn có thể nói lên suy nghĩ của mình ví dụ như : I'm in favor of having a normal life than being famous. As you have money.....
-----------> Trên đây là suy nghĩ là góp ý của Trân về bài viết của bn.
