Exercise 4: Rewrite the following stringy sentences into more appropriate ones
1. I have made it a point thoughout my life to try to save at least a part of my monthly income and put it into a savings account because I want to have a large nest egg to retire on, and I try never to give into the impulse of dipping into it because I would regret it in the future
→ Throughout my life, I have made it a priority to save a portion of my monthly income and deposit it into a savings account. This is because I desire to build a substantial nest egg for my retirement. I am determined to resist the temptation of using those savings for immediate gratification, as I know I would regret it in the future.
2. Halloween was always a very special holiday for me when I was a child because I got to dress up in a costume and went all over the neighborhood and got candy at one time because my mother made me put most of it away and I was only able to eat a little bit of it everyday, but it lasted a lot longer that way
→ Halloween held a special place in my heart during my childhood. I eagerly looked forward to dressing up in costumes and going door-to-door in the neighborhood to collect candy. However, my mother taught me the value of moderation by encouraging me to set aside most of the candy and enjoy a small portion each day. This allowed the enjoyment of Halloween to last for a longer period.
3. When I was in high school I was in the marching band and it was great because we got to into all the football and basketball games free, but most of the other students had to pay to get in, but we also had to march in all the parades that the city held during the year, which was okay during the winter months but during the summer it was very hot so it was hard
→ During my high school years, I had the privilege of being a part of the marching band. It was an incredible experience as it granted us free access to all the football and basketball games. Meanwhile, other students had to pay for admission. However, being a member of the marching band also meant participating in the city's parades throughout the year. While the winter months were tolerable, the summer parades posed a challenge due to the scorching heat.
