Question

các bạn ơi mình chuẩn bị thi bài văn tiếng anh nói về chủ đề môn học . mình làm xong bài văn rồi nhưng không biết đúng hay không các bạn dò tìm lỗi sai trong bài văn dùm mình nhé ! ^_^\

bài văn:

As you know, I study a lot of subjects such as english, music, art, math, literature, chemistry, physics, geography, history, biology, civic education, physical education, information technology. All of them are 14 subjects.

Firstly, it is physic, it is difficult. However, I often get good mark. But I think I should improve about experiment. Because it is quite important in life .

Then, it is geography. It is quite easy. Because I can draw and read the map. On the other hand, I can’t distinguish the weather and topographic on the world.

Equally important, it is the English. The English isn’t only difficult but also hard remember. There are 4 skills such as speaking skills, wirting skills, listening skills, reading skills. About my speaking skills is bad. Because I spend very little time speaking English. The writing skills is difficult . Because it needs a lot of new words and uses good grammar. I should write a lot of paragraphs, letters,…. My listening skill is not bad. Because I usually watch films with English and listen to music with English.

Finally, it is reading skills. If I am hard work . I will not get poor mark. In summary, all of the skills is very important and difficult. I need to improve and to practice all skills .

các bạn làm giúp mình nhé ! thank you very much.

Answer 1

As you know=> ko nên dùng khi viết, đây là văn nói, I study a lot of subjects such as english, music, art, math, literature, chemistry, physics, geography, history, biology, civic education, physical education, information technology. All of them are 14 subjects.

Firstly, it is physic, it is difficult => i find physic difficult . However, I often get good mark. But I think I should improve about experiment=> on doing experiment. Because it is quite important in life .

Then, it is geography. It is quite easy.=>geography is quite easy Because I can draw and read the map. On the other hand, I can’t distinguish the weather and topographic on the world.

Equally important, it is the English. The English isn’t only difficult but also hard to remember. There are 4 skills such as speaking skills, wirting skills, listening skills, reading skills. About my speaking skills is bad.=> About my speaking skills, it is bad Because I spend very little time speaking English. The=> 0 writing skills is also difficult . Because it needs a lot of new words and uses good grammar. I should write a lot of paragraphs, letters,…. My listening skill is not bad. Because I usually watch films with=> in English and listen to music with English => English songs

Finally, it is reading skills. If I am hard work=> hard-working . I will not get poor=> bad mark. In summary, all of the=> these skills is=> are very important and difficult. I need to improve and to=> 0 practice all skills .

Answer 2

Phong cách viết văn của bạn còn hơi dài dòng, sử dụng nhiều từ nối nhưng chưa được liên kết.

Mở bài còn lủng củng và dài dòng (MB chỉ nên viết 1 câu duy nhất, nêu luôn ý chính vì đây là paragraph)

Sử dụng từ trong đoạn văn còn chưa rõ ràng, khó nắm bắt ý chính của từng đoạn.

Enjoy !